It's very original and briefly satisfying. (<--that being a good thing.)

I like its perky touch.

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Because you love me, I shall love you.
Because you died, I shall live.
Because you had nothing, I have everything.
And because you gave me all these things,
I shall make music and art for you.
John 3:16 / 3 John 14

This...is true love.

(By the way...that wasn't really a critique. I just read it and had something to say about. LOL. Again, good job.)

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Because you love me, I shall love you.
Because you died, I shall live.
Because you had nothing, I have everything.
And because you gave me all these things,
I shall make music and art for you.
John 3:16 / 3 John 14

This...is true love.

Thank you.

A lovely, original little piece. The shortness just makes it sweeter. On critique, I do have a couple of points:

Our meeting point is what makes the time apart something to look forwards too.
On first reading, this makes it sound like being together makes the speaker look forward to being apart (as if he/she hates being around them).

...just one day a week that lasts four hours.
I wasn't sure whether you meant "lasts for hours" here, or that it specifically lasts four numerical hours.

However, I really like the line:
No work of art can explain a meeting place, no painting or poster.
Very poetic.

All in all, a really nice piece.

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"Why do I have six screens? Because I don't have room for eight." - Terry Pratchett

It is a certifiable fact that everything good in life is either illegal, amoral or fattening.

(Arriving from to give critique)

I like this piece; in my eyes it is sitting on the edge of poignant. The idea behind the piece is excellent, although the prose is merely good.

Your use of the definitions to bracket the piece is a very effective structural device. There is some lovely poetic language, like 'weekly voice', too. These are excellent, but the prose itself is more mundane.

I would suggest going through the prose line for line to find slightly ambiguous or grammatically dubious parts. For example, "Our meeting point is what gives me a reason to earn my money, if for a coffee or a sandwich," shouldn't include an 'if'. 'If' is always paired with 'then'. "one day a week that lasts four hours" seems to imply that the day is not twenty-four hours as usual, but only four.

These errors don't destroy your concept, but they do detract from it somewhat. Sharpening the prose will allow the idea behind it to shine through more brightly. You might also consider looking at the lengths of your paragraphs: the first one is very long, but all the others are very short. I think that a more consistent structure, perhaps with only one or two paragraphs, would suit the tone of this story better, although that's certainly only my opinion.

In general, I think this is a nice piece; I believe some improvement in the prose itself would fully justify me in calling it poignant.

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<sub>#Writers-Workshop -:- #Critique-It

I want a spirit like the wind.</sub>

Thank you

Thank you, I have been meaning to update it for sometime.

No problem!

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<sub>#Writers-Workshop -:- #Critique-It

I want a spirit like the wind.</sub>

Heya, I like the short simplicity of this and the flow is really nice. I really love how you start and end this with the definitions, it gives the rest of it some nice substance.

This sentence though:
Our meeting point makes the time apart bearable.
Instead of putting "...the time apart..." I would put "...our time apart..." since you've already established that this vignette is about "us," and the beginning of that sentence starts off with "our," I think the flow will go better. So it would read like this, "Our meeting point makes our time apart bearable."
And:
I hear your weekly voice,
I love how this sounds, I just don't understand what it means. What exactly is a "weekly voice?" After thinking about it, I come to the conclusion that you must mean that the voice is only heard weekly, but having to think that over distracts from the real point of this piece. Perhaps if it was worded something like, "I hear your weekly voice, that sweet voice that I can only hear once a week." That's kind of weak wording there, but it's something to reiterate what you're trying to get at, so the reader is distracted from the rest of the piece.

Overall a nice piece and enjoyable to read!